NOCTURNAL Episode #27

Hi Scott, since you asked for comments about the story, here a question for ya. It's a pretty minour thingy anyway, but since you strive for perfection.......

In the Lancers war-room switchback scene, where Frank, his Grandpa and Dad are talking about good 'ol times, you mentioned  the dads age.  Isn't  25 years a bit young, to  be  the  father  of a  7ish year old  boy.

I know, it's possible, but he would have been damn young for fatherhood, even for an italian gangster.

if i dont get my weekly sigler in 2 hours, i might have to listen to it!
Nate Dogg (#7 crackhits if SOMEONE doesn't keep trying to pass me)... "life is hard. But its one helluva lot harder if you're stupid"- -John Wayne

Wow, I just realized how this episode proves the benevolence of our FDO. I seem to recall the deal was if you signed up before a certain date and were labeled an Original Junkie, then you were eligible to be included in one of the FDO's works of fiction and possibly receive the high honor of being clobbered.  Now he lets non-OJs into the mix and even killed a few.

See how nice our FDO really is!  Watch out Hutchinsss; you're not the only nice guy in town... 

 Kicked ass, just like the rest of em

• These gathering hosts of loyal junkies, under the command of the great SCOTT

so.

Sigler speaks Russian.

 I was really touched by the "poshol na khui" in #27 I smiled with tears in my eyes, my girlfriend suspects I listen to some sentimental crap. Why are you doing this to me?
And great job by Bill translating those phrases and the "blue" reference.
But there are two TINY problems with cases / stylistscs. (open source novel, right?)
"Menya zhdoot seychas v barye." 

 would sound better as:

 "Menya zhdoot v barye."

you really don't need "seychas" ("right now") there -- in Russian we omit a lot. and shorter phrasing makes Sasha sound tougher :)

"Znachit: ili ty otvetish' na vsyekh voprosov nachal'nika"
should be:
"Znachit: ili ty otvetish' na vsye voprosy nachal'nika"
 

(that's just different case or whaterver)

(and to Bill: why "zhdoot" but "khui"? if you'd spelled it "khooi" Scott would have had less of an American accent saying it and sounded tougher as well. he fucking needs it when reading Russian :-p)

I just luuuved the reference to Jack Wakes Up; but could you cut back on the Barbara Cartland'ish feely-feely between Robin and the Ninja - or, are you just '...in a place in your life, where, like aahm, you sort'a just need to talk 'bout feelings'n'stuff, man...' ?

Btw - don't you *dare* snuff Pookie Chang - he so needs to see this through to the end.